Comment on Daeron "The Undead" Targaryen | A Plague of Poor Decisions

  1. No_sleepie on Chapter 5 Mon 23 Mar 2026 07:03PM UTC

    no_sleepie

    Also, can I ask—
    Is it giving horror, at least? Is the scene with Allyn visually horrific? Any feedback helps. It's my first time tackling a horror-comedy (well, dramedy) fic.

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    1. Golden_Doe on Chapter 5 Mon 23 Mar 2026 08:34PM UTC

      If you are asking about visual horror, aka "gore", then I may be the wrong person to ask. I have been desensitised to all manners of blood splatter years ago through real-life events.

      For me personally the "horrific" part was the combination of:
      1. Maekar watching another father see his son "die" - this comes from my pre-existing knowledge of Daeron's fate. I do not know if this layer was intended but it's there and, in my opinion, works well.
      2. Ashford flashback. I haven't killed my own brother (hopefully never will), but the whole PTSD-adjacent theme is something I can relate to. May not work for other people.
      3. Master-of-feasts confusing Allyn's "twitching" for signs of life and therefore not noticing what's actually happening.
      4. The fact that all of this plays out (including the fate of Allyn's sword-swallowing buddy) while Aegon, Rhae & Daella are gods know where & Daeron is being suicidally reckless (Aemon is safe-ish at the Citadel and Aerion has the Narrow Sea to thank for).

      TL;DR: I think the implications of the scene are scary enough. Does not feel "rushed".

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      1. No_sleepie on Chapter 5 Tue 24 Mar 2026 12:14AM UTC

        no_sleepie

        Good to hear it doesn't feel rushed and it's giving horror.

        I debated if I wanted to add that quick flash back but it felt like it was needed.

        Thank you so much for reading my little fic! <3

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