I really liked the premise of the story, I just wished you hadn't glossed over the fact that he was missing for three years and essentially took those years from Derek as her father. Yes Stiles was upset and frustrated at what Derek said and wanted to leave, I'm just not sure letting everyone who loves you think you are dead isn't anything but a weak way out. He still in essence stole Luna's childhood from Derek and Derek was what just ok with it. Like sure you were dead, now your alive i'm so happy it wasn't my fault that I'm gonna overlook never getting to know Luna until you were made to tell me cause everyone else found out before you. I'm sure it's implied that they talked about it in these last two short chapters, but even Erica got mad. People forgive, but not that quickly. You wrote a wonderful story, it just seemed rushed in the last bit to get to the end. I look forward to reading some more from you, thank you for taking the time to put your vision into words.
This was actually one of the reasons I deleted the story originally and then reposted it now. The way it was before, there was really no reason for Stiles to just up and leave and he knew they thought he was dead. See, the way I see it, Derek kind of broke Stiles' heart, and in doing so implied that Stiles and him were a mistake, and Stiles ultimately rationalized that Derek would think their child was a mistake. If a kid thinks that one of their parents never wanted them, it can screw them up. Stiles was really trying to protect Luna from those feelings. Then, throughout the story, Stiles begins to realize that Derek never really meant what he said and that it was a really screwed up situation (and to clarify, when Stiles left, he thought that the pack knew he was leaving, just not where he went. He didn't realize they thought he was dead. When he found out, he also thought Derek still would think their child was a mistake, therefore he didn't tell the pack because he wanted to protect Luna.) Later on it does get to a point where Stiles should tell the pack (ie. When he forgives Derek and realizes Derek lied about his feelings on their night together) and I see where he messed up there. To be honest, I needed to wait a few years in the story so he and Jackson would be finished with college and that Luna was old enough to talk (she contributed in a large part to the story). I know that they do forgive Stiles fairly quickly, but they understand that something happened (only Derek knows what that something is) that made Stiles need to leave. Add the fact that he didn't know they thought he had died, I find it fairly easy to forgive him (But that's just me, people take things differently, like Erica did). The whole thing with Derek missing Luna's childhood I completely understand. But Derek, I think, wanted family so badly he didn't mind that he missed it (that much) and was just happy to have his daughter and mate back. While that might not be right, that's how I saw it for Derek. I do know this isn't all that realistic, I imagine they talked about it in the part I didn't write, and came to terms with it. I maybe rushed that part a little bit because I'm still working on conclusions to my fics, I do hope to get better. And do remember, Stiles was only 18 at the time, he was scared, pregnant, and believing that his baby daddy (for lack of a better word) didn't want the child. He is allowed to make some bad choices. I acknowledge the points you made, they are all very true, and I hope this kind of clears it up (I know it doesn't exactly but these are my reasons). Thanks for reading and caring enough to comment your issues with it :) I hope to learn to become better at character reactions and things like that (I'm still young; learning to grow). I hope you enjoyed despite your problems with it, and please do come back to read more, if you'd like to.
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