Wow. So, this was beautiful, and your third person POV was excellently written. It was nice to see you get into and explore Vi's mind and reactions and thoughts. Your use of metaphor and simile was lovely all throughout, and very impressive. Like, some of your lines floored me, like "Giving up the possibility of a future, because the promise of the past had her in a chokehold". It's such a character defining statement about Vi. She does want a new life, a different life, and I understand her desperation to bring all the people she loved from her old life into her new life, and make it better for everyone. To fix the past...the problem is it can't ever be fixed.
Also, poor Caitlyn. I can so see this happening with her. She is devoted to her work in the first place, and when your relationship is in a haphazard place with random sights and sporadic visits from your lover, you would need to distract yourself and push your limits of endurance to the extreme. It's so hard and difficult when all you want to do is be with someone, and time and fate and everything else fucking intervenes. It hurts, and is harmful.
I adored worried Vi taking care of her Cupcake. She was gentle, kind, and nurturing, and my heart ached when Caitlyn wept in her sleep begging Vi to stay. I've lived through being the one hearing that, and it is wretched and heartbreaking and not something I ever want to hear again. I love that Vi makes the right choice for a new future, something she can truly build, and chooses to stay with Caitlyn. Their reunion is joyous, the sex spontaneous, softly passionate, and lovely. This is a fantastic one-shot, and I thoroughly enjoyed every moment of reading it.
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RavenSinead Sat 07 May 2022 10:24PM UTC
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