I've read this several times today, and it's made me smile every time! :) I don't know that Lucy gets closure, per se, with Caspian, but she gets - something. Sustenance. Continuity, so that she feels a little less disconnected and bereft. (Closure, I think, in whatever form, will happen when I get to where this is logically going, which is a rewrite of Silver Chair, but I'm not going to get there for a bit.) I don't focus on what happens with Caspian here, except for that first scene, because I think it's going to come back later, and I was more interested in what happens with her siblings and Eustace, and how Lucy wades through her guilt and grief. It's also just - bits, because I still don't know the whole story.
Oh my gosh, present tense is terrible. You have no idea how many times I went through this, trying to make sure the tense was consistent! I'm sure I still got some of it wrong. Not my forte. But it was how the story wanted to be written, so I did. I'm writing bits and pieces right now for the wedding, and it's all in my normal tense, and it's such a relief! :D
I guess I mean closure in the sense that at least they can talk and know what happened. They don't have to keep wondering. Or at least, Caspian doesn't. After thinking that he'd lost both his wife and his son in one blow, now he knows that at least his wife is safe, albeit still lost to him. But alive, at least, and still connected across time and space and worlds!
I appreciate the effort you went through, in gifting this to me, and I'm honored. I'm happy for you that the writing is going better in your normal tense, and I look forward to reading about Lucy and Caspian's wedding! And if you're ever inspired to write in the present tense again, I'd be more than happy to read it through for you and check for inconsistencies! :)
That's true! It is definitely some closure for Caspian, in the sense that he knows that Lucy is not dead, but safe, and that he can still talk to her! She is not lost to him (or Rilian) entirely. Less agony, all around. <3
I don't know what is so difficult about present tense, for me, but it really is! Maybe I've just read too many books where that isn't the case. And I'm going to send you an e-mail about the wedding story - the little bits I wrote were about everything but the wedding itself - having an ancient Queen of Narnia marry a Telemarine-turned-Narnian king is not as easy as one might suppose!
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